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posted November 14th, 2015, 2:01 am


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January 28th, 2015, 5:40 pm

GreenKrog

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I just realized that Annie's line in frame 5 is one incredibly long sentence. I'm not sure I am proud of that. It works, and I don't know that it should be split into smaller sentences, just.. blegh.

There is a lot of text in the middle frame, and it takes a few times to read through for it to make sense. But it does make sense, if you give it time. It actually means a lot. Still, sorry for the text bomb.

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November 15th, 2015, 5:58 pm

mittfh

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@GreenKrog: 31 words isn't too long - I think MS Word's grammar checker starts moaning at 40 - and it's a complete sentence, rather than a bunch of indepedent clauses linked with commas or joining words (and, but etc.)

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November 18th, 2015, 12:57 am

Jax Rhapsody (Guest)

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I read it over, and I can't think of one place to even put a coma. Seems to work how it i, unless you wanted to rewrite it. Besides; most comics don't have punctuation, that I've read.

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